The Annunaki: The Fallen Ones

[FarleyFlavors]

we are all individuals after all.

I'm not.

[newcastle]

First two lines in the book...

"Every story has a voice. Its falls upon our shoulders to bear witness to the story and to act as contributors to developing its book thus to be its hands to for full its destiny."

I've said it before Frater - you are in serious need of a proofreader.

Take care FF.

You'll be dismissed as 'arrogant'.

[carrie]

Well just had a look for this book on Amazon and it says no longer available so maybe Frater has withdrawn it for proof reading?

[newcastle]

Well just had a look for this book on Amazon and it says no longer available so maybe Frater has withdrawn it for proof reading?

Or maybe the Annunaki have demanded its withdrawal pending a libel action.

[Frater0082]

Well just had a look for this book on Amazon and it says no longer available so maybe Frater has withdrawn it for proof reading?

Or maybe the Annunaki have demanded its withdrawal pending a libel action.

Actually I just republished it because I had to do some tweaking but it's available now.

[Frater0082]

First two lines in the book...

"Every story has a voice. Its falls upon our shoulders to bear witness to the story and to act as contributors to developing its book thus to be its hands to for full its destiny."

I've said it before Frater - you are in serious need of a proofreader.

Take care FF.

You'll be dismissed as 'arrogant'.

I don't care it will stand as it is. Newcastle you are a jerk.

[Frater0082]

First two lines in the book...

"Every story has a voice. Its falls upon our shoulders to bear witness to the story and to act as contributors to developing its book thus to be its hands to for full its destiny."

I've said it before Frater - you are in serious need of a proofreader.

How is that in need of proof reading. I deliberately wrote it that way to convey a message.

[newcastle]

First two lines in the book...

"Every story has a voice. Its falls upon our shoulders to bear witness to the story and to act as contributors to developing its book thus to be its hands to for full its destiny."

I've said it before Frater - you are in serious need of a proofreader.

How is that in need of proof reading. I deliberately wrote it that way to convey a message.

The message being........."I can't write English".

[Frater0082]

Again, like I said to those who understandare me I truly appreciate it alot.

[Mad Dilys]

Why is not being able to write English funny?

[newcastle]

Why is not being able to write English funny?

It's not...particularly if you want to write books.

What's funny (in fact, bizarre) is an author writing bad English deliberately - so he claims - in order to "convey a message".

[FarleyFlavors]

First two lines in the book...

"Every story has a voice. Its falls upon our shoulders to bear witness to the story and to act as contributors to developing its book thus to be its hands to for full its destiny."

I've said it before Frater - you are in serious need of a proofreader.

How is that in need of proof reading. I deliberately wrote it that way to convey a message.

Have you read the Amazon reviews for your other books?



"I couldn't force myself to read very far. Terrible grammar, many misspellings." One star.



"This book desperately needs proofreading and edited; it is full of misspellings and grammatical errors." One star.



Hilariously, this is your one three-star review...

"A few mid spells but not enuf to take away from the story."

Sorry Frater, but Newcastle is correct. You can't write English.

[Mad Dilys]

There are many reasons why someone may not write a language well.

None of which I find funny, but if they are in error a gentle correction of the script might make a lasting improvement.

Poking fun at them does not improve the situation.

[Frater0082]

Ive tried Lord knows I've tried and everytime I'm shot down. This makes me want to stop writing as a whole because of this. This is my dream and for some one diminish my work is purely hurtful

No matter Newscastle thank you for proving my point.

Miss Karma's a bitch and she don't play nice. I'm sorry that you are miserable. I'm not

[newcastle]

There are many reasons why someone may not write a language well.

None of which I find funny, but if they are in error a gentle correction of the script might make a lasting improvement.

Poking fun at them does not improve the situation.

I'm well aware of that, thank you, and therefore would not normally comment on people who have a problem= such as dyslexia = or those who are a bit backward.

But he said he did it intentionally so his problem is, I would suggest, deeper than an inability to spell or employ correct syntax.

Moreover, people who call others names deserve little consideration, in my book.

[Frater0082]

I cannot win for losing.

[Dusak]

To achieve at anything Frater 0082, you have to give it your all, produce the best job you can. It is obvious that you are falling at the first hurdle by not double checking your work, or getting help from, say a friend, to proof read your work. There are many free spellchecker and grammar programs available on the net for you you take advantage of. Your mistakes are so glaringly obvious that a fourth grader could point them out, so you expected readership, adults, are not going to be page turners. I would withdraw it, buy a red pen and do a thorougher proofread and edit, then do it again. Hard work and determination produce results, not a lackadaisical approach as your work thus far displays.

[Frater0082]

To achieve at anything Frater 0082, you have to give it your all, produce the best job you can. It is obvious that you are falling at the first hurdle by not double checking your work, or getting help from, say a friend, to proof read your work. There are many free spellchecker and grammar programs available on the net for you you take advantage of. Your mistakes are so glaringly obvious that a fourth grader could point them out, so you expected readership, adults, are not going to be page turners. I would withdraw it, buy a red pen and do a thorougher proofread and edit, then do it again. Hard work and determination produce results, not a lackadaisical approach as your work thus far displays.

Have you even read the book?

[Dusak]

I read the ''look inside.'' It is not something that I would buy, having little to no interest in such topics.

[carrie]

Frater have YOU read the book? Yes I know you wrote it but if you had read it after writing it then you might just understand Dusak's well meaning comments.